I wrote a poem, tell me what you think.

MyhorseAnnie · 05-07-2008, 01:57 PM

Picked on at school,
By the people who thought they were cool,
Every day at home,
She was in her own zone,
When she didnt come down when they call,
The parents found her hanging on the wall,
Next to her was a note that said-
"You knew i never could mend,
You knew i had not one friend,
You knew about the asault,
This is all YOUR fault."

Please tell me what you think of it.

I think i did pretty good on it, but, im not sure.

Thank you!

MyhorseAnnie · 05-07-2008, 03:42 PM

*Bump* Any opinions on it? Thanks

merlin · 05-07-2008, 07:13 PM

ummm.. wow intense poem.
i hope ur not feeling like this.

MyhorseAnnie · 05-08-2008, 04:38 AM

^No im not feeling like that. I just wrote it.

Abberlaze · 05-08-2008, 06:13 AM

It's pretty good. Keep on writing!

But beware... I always find that what I write and read are usually a product of my emotions... or become like my emotions...

MyhorseAnnie · 05-08-2008, 02:00 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Abberlaze

It's pretty good. Keep on writing!

But beware... I always find that what I write and read are usually a product of my emotions... or become like my emotions...

Im usually really happy, so it's not about me. I think i just wrote about what can happen to some people if they dont talk to people, and stuff.

05-07-2008, 01:57 PM	#1
MyhorseAnnie Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Wisconsin! Posts: 1,104 Images: 232 Blog Entries: 7	I wrote a poem, tell me what you think. Picked on at school, By the people who thought they were cool, Every day at home, She was in her own zone, When she didnt come down when they call, The parents found her hanging on the wall, Next to her was a note that said- "You knew i never could mend, You knew i had not one friend, You knew about the asault, This is all YOUR fault." Please tell me what you think of it. I think i did pretty good on it, but, im not sure. Thank you! __________________ <3Annie && Stormy <3

05-07-2008, 03:42 PM	#2
MyhorseAnnie Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Wisconsin! Posts: 1,104 Images: 232 Blog Entries: 7	Bump Any opinions on it? Thanks __________________ <3Annie && Stormy <3

05-08-2008, 04:38 AM	#4
MyhorseAnnie Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Wisconsin! Posts: 1,104 Images: 232 Blog Entries: 7	^No im not feeling like that. I just wrote it. __________________ <3Annie && Stormy <3

05-08-2008, 06:13 AM	#5
Abberlaze Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: PA Posts: 869 Images: 22	It's pretty good. Keep on writing! But beware... I always find that what I write and read are usually a product of my emotions... or become like my emotions... __________________ Too late for second-guessing Too late to go back to sleep It's time to trust my instincts Close my eyes: and leap!

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merlin Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: British Columbia,Canada Posts: 748	ummm.. wow intense poem. i hope ur not feeling like this.